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| Ladyz | 2009.03.07 - 01:17PM | 11: Ten: The Tests | Signed |
| amazing story!!!!
brilliant plot!!!
i am soooo hooked!!!!
i wish you could update sooner!!!!
can't wait to see what happens!!!
scratch the update sooner,i wish you could post the complete story at once!!!!
or send it to me-i won't tell anyone,i promise,it will be a secret!!!!
is there no way that i can tempt you??
getting desperate for more here...
ok i will stop now,wouldn't want to piss off favorite fic author...
Thank you for sharing!!!
Author's Response: LOL There seem to be a lot of people who want to lure me into giving away the whole thing :D . I have RL friends who are promising me cheesecake, and I'm still holding out on them; sadly, you're going to have to be patient, too. I'm glad that you're hooked and enjoying it ;) Thanks for taking the time to review ^_^ | |||
| Tzu | 2009.03.07 - 11:50AM | 11: Ten: The Tests | Signed |
| Why did you end in such exciting moment? I'm dying. I'm enjoying some Hermione and Harry friendship, but when I have imagine of angry Snape in my head I can't think about anything else. Please, can this be very long scene? ;)
Chapter is great. Visit of minister was exciting, Remus' case is interesting and... what can I say? I'm looking forward next chapter. And what's about Harry?! You seem forget about him, he wants to be loved. Author's Response: Cliffies are an integral part of posting online; it's nice to hear that they're working :D . Glad you enjoyed the chapter. Harry isn't forgotten, he just hasn't worked out how to effectively throw himself at Draco yet ;) . Thanks again for the review ^_^ | |||
| hedgehog | 2009.03.07 - 11:12AM | 11: Ten: The Tests | Signed |
| Ugh! So hard to wait for another week. I hope Draco starts factoring in this more in the near future! Thanks. Author's Response: We're getting closer to more Draco time, really we are, although you may not be happy with how that turns out.... Thanks for taking the time to review ^_^ | |||
| Jong_Kahn | 2009.03.07 - 01:55AM | 11: Ten: The Tests | Signed |
| I really liked the way Hermione and Harry questioned the unknown aurors. Frankly, that's good advice for ANYONE in a situation with unknown "authorities" claiming the right to make demands. All too often we feel we're supposed to go along, not make waves, when it's possible we're being asked to do things that are really NOT in our own best interests. Very well done, indeed! Author's Response: Thank you. Especially in the midst of a more or less official war, it really seemed to me that they should not be taking anything for granted. Harry and Hermione have been in enough situations with people not turning out to be who/what they thought that I think they'd be careful and want others to be careful, too. Thanks again for the review ^_^ | |||
| Jong_Kahn | 2009.03.07 - 01:11AM | 10: Nine: The Bets | Signed |
| And the last one, 45 lines up from the bottom: "I'm so sorry," he gabbled. "I wasn't staring at at you, " I would drop the italicized "at", keep the regular "at", and italicize "you". So Harry would be telling Hermione, " I wasn't staring at YOU..." Glad to help be an extra pair of eyes for you. Your work is a pleasure to read. Author's Response: This neatens it up for sure. Thank you ^_^ | |||
| Jong_Kahn | 2009.03.07 - 01:01AM | 10: Nine: The Bets | Signed |
| Later in the second section (after Severus has burned Hermione and gets her the burn potion/creme)."To speed complete recover." This only needs the letter 'y' to complete the last word, make it "recovery". Author's Response: Straight up typo. Can't tell you how many times I read it as "recovery". Ah, well. Thanks again ^_^ | |||
| Jong_Kahn | 2009.03.07 - 12:51AM | 10: Nine: The Bets | Signed |
| In the second section, 16 lines down, beginning with "They had continued to keep in touch by owl," better verb agreement is needed in the last sentence. "If Ron had ever realized just how much Quidditch theory was in the letters," should be followed by "...she'd probably never even HAVE GOTTEN to read them, let alone keep them." Forgive me; I'm not trying to be "fussbudgety" here (No! I'm doing it without trying!)--just want you to be the best writer you can be--and you're a damn fine one!
Author's Response: Much better; thank you again (as *I* want to be the best writer I can be) ^_^ | |||
| Jong_Kahn | 2009.03.07 - 12:26AM | 10: Nine: The Bets | Signed |
| Twelve lines down, beginning with "Hermione had no idea who Millicent had slept with," should be "...WHOM Millicent had slept with." As a know-it-all, even to herself, 'Mione would use 'whom'.
The only reason I'll be doing these separately, is I lose the cut&paste here on the review whenever I go back & forth. If I could, I'd put 'em all together, but I'm unable to. Forgive my multiple reviews; but that's why. Author's Response: You're very right; Hermione is always be anal with her who/whoms. I try to make sure they're there, but sometimes I miss them. Thanks again ^_^ | |||
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