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Reviews for Lay Me Low

slesson2011.01.15 - 12:08AM4: Three: If I Am To Be Condemned For My Sins, Let Me Commit Them FirstSigned
Wow! I was so on edge during the exchange between Hermione and Severus. I couldn't figure out if she was just playing a part or getting caught up in it as well--I liked how it wasn't very clear for her either! Looking forward to the next installment, I'm enjoying this story very much, thanks!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I think it was a little bit of both, actually. Our Potions master can be very addictive.

Green Aurora2011.01.14 - 04:09PM3: Two: From The Waiting To HearSigned
I like this story, but perhaps a bit of constructive criticism? I find the inner monologues to be too long to be realistic. For instance, when Severus is thinking about 'acting offended... little one?' I find that section to be too structured to be believable- there are almost too many thoughts (at once) for the writing. If you were to make those sections more prompted by dialog, with shorter segments of thought, I think it would strengthen the narrative flow. I do think the rest is excellent!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your thoughtful review. It is hard to balance the idea of thought vs dialogue, and this is probably why I desperately need a beta, to have that extra set of eyes on things like this. I really appreciate you not only taking the time to read the story, but to offer ways to make it better. I'm not one to ignore good advice, and hopefully in future I can get that balance a little better. I hope you continue to enjoy the story.

Ehann2011.01.14 - 03:00PM3: Two: From The Waiting To HearSigned
This is really amazing. Great work!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Demarius2011.01.14 - 01:49PM3: Two: From The Waiting To HearSigned
Oh, this is so so good. Having spent the day editing something much heavier and less invigorating than this I no longer have the wit to contribute anything more substantial - other than to say "more please!"

Author's Response: Thank you. I really appreciate it. I hope you 'll continue to enjoy it.

trust_me_iknow2011.01.14 - 07:13AM2: One: Not Enough Fingers To Count The CostSigned
Very excited about where you're going with this. From the moment you mentioned him being a Northern boy in the first chapter, I was hooked. It's something that's often overlooked about Snape and something that I love. Can't wait for more. Happy writing!

Author's Response: Thank you! I know that canon only hints about exactly where Spinner's End actually is, I've always thought of him as being a Manc, and having to work hard to 'posh' up by being around the purebloods in Slytherin. It just seemed right that he would be so disdainful, and at the same time, envious of Sirius' easy, effortless attitude

whisker842011.01.13 - 11:47AM3: Two: From The Waiting To HearSigned
Okay, I *LOVE* this story. Conflicted Severus, and a Hermione with far more depth, insight, and potential to her than any of the characters have realized yet, I bet. This set-up has truly epic-length potential, and your writing is, of course, outstanding. I'm almost sad to have started reading this before it's finished, because I have to be so patient now, and that's so very hard! Great work.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your thoughtful review, whisker! I apologise that it will come one chapter at a time, and I hope you continue to enjoy it.

ladyjulian2011.01.13 - 01:58AM3: Two: From The Waiting To HearSigned
You are a fine and compelling writer. Thank you.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate that.

roosickle2011.01.13 - 12:20AM3: Two: From The Waiting To HearSigned
loving tthe fast updates : ) Your painting a picture of a much deeper Severus than most other authors do and I'm glad of it, I've read black eyed angel of yours as well.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope you will continue to enjoy it. The updates will slow down as the chapters are getting more complicated, and I'm rubbish at editing. I think the admin cringe when they see a new chapter!

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