Reviews for Luring the Enchantress
| marisamarinee | 2014.06.27 - 01:18AM | 5: Falling Into Place | Signed |
Slowly getting addicted to this story. Can't seen to put it down.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading. :) |
| marisamarinee | 2014.06.26 - 11:46PM | 2: Taking Advantage of the Situation | Signed |
| Smooth talking Sev, why yes ;) |
| holyflyingpig | 2013.09.18 - 02:37PM | 22: The Truth | Signed |
| I really enjoy reading this story and I do plan on finishing it. However I have to say a few things and I hope you don't find them too harsh. The whole debacle between Hermione and Severus is repetitive. "Let's have sex. Let's not have sex. Yes. No. I'm ready. No I'm too nervous." It's too much. I liked the idea in the beginning but now it's just too silly! I also find Hermione to be very ignorant, childish, and naive. This is not canon Hermione. I understand that she is young. You however, portray her as a preteen in evey stressful situation. She is a seventh year, not a firstie. And lastly I find it improbable that all three of the dream team take to confinement so casually. Normally they would be breaking down the doors to fight Voldemort. I understand (maybe) hiding away Draco and Ginny given the circumstances. Harry, Hermione, and Ron would be out there. Not hiding behind walls and pretending a war isn't going on.
I think you have a fantastic idea and great potentila for wonderful characters. This story is a few years old and I'm suggesting a rewrite! Maybe approach it from a different angle and go from there! I'd love to read the revised story!
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| blush | 2013.09.02 - 10:11PM | 17: Life at the Castle | Signed |
| My first comment, half way thought I figured it was a good point.
I noticed a few spelling errors, but nothing major, I wish I remembered where, but they didn't hinder the story.
I am not sure if I like this type of Hermione but I am enjoying the story nonetheless .
Thank you!! |
| bingohandjob | 2013.07.01 - 02:22PM | 2: Taking Advantage of the Situation | Signed |
| Hmmm.. Something that's never given too much scope is the Snape character being a Head of House, and that it was a long held post. That alone suggests the character possessed good pastoral care skills. So I'm slightyly foxed as to why this chapter belabours his efforts in that department. It ought to be second nature. Well , ok, twisting second nature. ;) |
| loreen77 | 2013.06.09 - 02:09AM | 42: Back to Good: Part 2 | Signed |
| Very enjoyable story. Yes your hg made me want to slap her a few time, but i feel that way about most 18 year olds. I thought your story was well plotted abd written. |
| loreen77 | 2013.06.05 - 10:25AM | 5: Falling Into Place | Signed |
| I am enjoying your story but ron's last conversation seemed a little off....it seemed too mature and rational compared to the other comments ron has made in this story....oh well, not a big deal. Onto the next chapte. |
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