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| breastlady | 2005.07.28 - 08:18PM | 9: Transition | Signed |
| OK, I haven't finished the chapter yet, but I can't believe these people are letting a person who they know is abusive take Hermione off where he can isolate her further and have her trapped at his mercy while she's still unconscious. You remember how he made it impossible to leave the last time she was there? Albus and Minerva are killing me. Now that Severus has forced Hermione to marry him, they act like she is his property and he can do with her as he sees fit. His rights as her husband are inviolate even though he has freely admitted he is not on her list of favorites. If she wakes up and doesn't want to go will they let him force her to go if he insists in taking her against her will? I guess I'll find out.
I'm back, but I still haven't finished the chapter. I can't believe Hermione is blaming what happened on Harry! If Severus hadn't been a bastard in the first place, none of this would have happened. Only the day before she had asked Harry for his help. Now she is ready to use him as the scape goat for what would never have happened if Snape had just been a reasonably civil adult for the last two days. He has been nothing but a scheming, immature bastard from even before he knew she was pregnant! This is all Severus' fault! Harry has seen his best friend hurt badly repeatedly by this son of a bitch. What kind of a friend would he be if he didn't try to help Hermione when she herself told him she had been blackmailed into marring him. Harry has never done anything to Hermione that is malicious. Severus has done so repeatedly. If she blames this on Harry she deserves the co-dependant idiot of the year award. These are just the kind of domestic violence cases the cops hate. A woman calls the police because her husband or boyfriend is being violent toward her and as soon as they try to arrest him, the woman becomes furious with the authorities for being mean to her abusive partner. Hermione needs some serious therapy from a good psychologist. She's lost it. Even after everything else, I would have expected better from Hermione. Now she is no better than Severus if she really writes Harry that letter. Harry is the only person not going along with Hermione and the baby being Severus Snape's personal property to do with as he pleases as if she were a wrecked car or an annoying pet. Author's Response: It was sad, what happened, and I suppose in grief you don't think clearly or say things that you don't mean. She'll come to realize that it's not Harry's fault, but everyone's fault that's involved. I believe Snape will come to agree with that as well. You are at one of the turning points in the story. The first epiphany he had was when he couldn't be with that paid woman. He realized that he felt so much more for Hermione. More things will come to light. Please continue to let me know what you think. I appreciate the honest reviews, and I agree that Harry is doing what most friends would do.HE's taking up for her. | |||
| Vampire_Exotica | 2005.07.28 - 08:30AM | 15: Full Circle | Signed |
| Absolutly fantastic. I've been gripped right from the begining!!!! Love how you've written both snape and hermione and I like how you've written harry and ron aswell. Interesting use of hooch might I add. Not a character I expected to see but she added an interesting element to the story. (Love Ramnsein's music too btw) All in all a 10 out of 10 from me. Author's Response: Thank you so much. I appreciate that! I always try to add Hooch in. I just loved her in the movie, I guess, and try to utlize her "crisp" and "blunt" personality. lol... hope you check out my other stories! | |||
| breastlady | 2005.07.28 - 02:29AM | 8: Unanimity | Signed |
| You could not make Snape soft enough for me at this point. He's already done the damage. I can't believe Hermione is letting him Fuck her. I wish Harry had cut his dick off! No one has ever made me hate Snape before.
I grew up with an abusive father who is still a clueless bastard and 3 wives later can't figure out what's wrong with women. He wonders why I hardly visit and go to my mom's for holidays after I watched him hit and manhandle my mother and told her it was her fault because she made him mad. It was always her fault. One time we didn't have enough food so she went and got a can of peas from his hunting gear so she paid big time that night while me and my brother cried. He grabed her hard by the wrists and twisted as he pushed them into her chest and slamed her several times against the refrigerator, then pounded her chest with his index finger while he screamed in her face. Me and my brother hit him on the legs and begged him to stop. She just kept telling him she was sorry and would try to do better. We were sent upstairs so I didn't see the rest that particular time. It went on for hours. He is such an ass hole he dosn't even remember it because it was nothing remarkable for him to be this way. My mom spent 11 years trying to be better and thinking if she just loved him enough he would change until he got really mad one night , got her down on the couch and choked her until she passed out. She finally thought, "You know, someday he might accidentally kill me then there won't be anyone to take care of the children. We snuck out, she married the first man who asked within weeks and ran away with us to Hawaii for 4 years. My dad actually had us feeling sorry for him. Then I grew up.
The only things Snape and my father understand and respect is, "if you kick her ass, I will kick yours worse". They have no mercy unless they get something out of it. I promise you, my father will die in a rest home that smells like piss. He won't even know why. He'll just think he raised rotten ungrateful children and will feel terribly wronged. And I will continue my happy marriage to a wonderful loving man as I have for the last 26 years. My mother is welcome to live with me anytime she'd like. She is finally married to someone who truely values her. I will take care of him when he is old even if I don't always agree with him. He isn't a bastard and he loves my mother. Snape better get a clue about how his child will think of him when he/shes grow up and sees him for what he is.
Sorry I guess the story just hit a button.
I hope no woman thinks what Hermione is doing is brave or noble. Hermione is being a fool not to see this for what it is. She didn't feel she had a choice but she shoudn't be delusional. This is an unacceptable relationship built on blackmail and selfishness and that can't be changed. She doesn't deserve this. No one does. Unfortunately many woman are so afraid of the ass hole who threatens to hunt them down and make them pay if they leave and who threaten to take her children from her so that these women feel they must stay. They know he's not bluffing. He'll do it. Then they isolate the woman from her family so she has no where to run to. That's why woman kill husbands. I believe the Snape in this story when he says he'll kill Harry if Hermione goes with him. I think Hermione knows it too.
I still think you are a great story teller even if I am feeling very upset at this situation in the story. I hope my emotional reaction doesn't discourage you. I don't mean it as critisism. You've done a great job of getting into the head of an abusive person. You've done well at showing not everyone is nice and really wants to be good. This kind of person dosn't think like normal people do. We make a mistake if we think we can reason with them like nice people. They know they are mean and they justify it in their own minds just like Severus. He'll be on good behavior for a week or a month to get what he wants then he'll go back to feeling it's all about him and become abusive again. Then he'll be sorry, buy flowers etc. but the cycle goes on.
Still your fan,
breastlady Author's Response: I am so very sorry that my story has brought up so many bad memories for you. I am glad that things have worked out now though, and that you all were able to escape before her killed someone. The thing with Snape in this story is that he warned her repeatedly that he would not change, and he would not love her. She accepted that. He's controlling and possessive, and yes, I think he would have tried to fatally harm Harry if he'd married her and claimed "his" child. That's likely part of the reason Hermione allowed him to blackmail him. I don't think that this Snape would ever beat her. He's above that, yet worse than that b/c he does now how to manipulate her. I think a lot of things that happen soon will bring things to light and cause a slow evolution of change. I just hope you keep reading long enough to see it. :) | |||
| breastlady | 2005.07.28 - 12:00AM | 7: Taking Action! | Signed |
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I have always loved SS/HG romances but in this one you are probably the closet to Canon Snape as possible. Though it hurts to say so, if Hermione marries him he will make her miserable. He is a manipulative ass. His sad history is no comfort when some controlling ass hole is trying to make you feel guilty to get his way. I can't see him ever changing.
Marriages of convenience have be done for ages. You can always learn to love someone who is good to you. Sex is not the most important part of a marriage. Respect is. Snape has too much baggage to be a good husband. A good lay is all he'll ever be. After going to her parents like this I will not be able to respect a Hermione who would marry such a ruthless man who would stop at nothing to get his way. For all he knew they would disown her for this and that would have suited him just fine. She would have had no where else to turn, no one but Harry to support her. That is his plan. He is using her parents against her and betrayed her trust. And now she can't even trust her parents. I can't believe that the Grangers that raised the brightest which of this age would be so gullible. If my parents took a man's side against me in this manner I would never be able to trust them again. They never even said "we need to hear Hermione's side of this" before they made their minds up. They don't even know this man. How could she ever trust parents like that.
I could never see a woman being sexually or otherwise attracted to this kind of man after all of this.
I am also ashamed of Albus. Severus does not deserve her. Would you want such a manipulative and cruel man raising a child? He will treat the child just as bad as he treats Hermione. I can't imagine that any thing else you could write will make me think better of Severus, though I hope I'm wrong.
In spite of all this, I think this is an exceptionally well crafted story. You have me spell bound. I couldn't even sleep last night thinking about it. You have done an incredible job here. I have been reading this ship obsessivly for four years. No one has ever had me change sides against Severus before. I applaud you! I've most likely been in Snape denial. Book 5 has crushed me. However, I will still enjoy stories that portray him in a better light. Severus and Hermione never get together in the book so why not an AU Snape? Keep writing wonderful SS/HG stories please!
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the breastlady Author's Response: Severus is really horrible in this story. For now, anyway. Things will change along the way; unfortunately, it's a slow change. I think Hermione feels that she has no place else to go, so she reluctantly agrees to marry him. In her mind, she can always leave if he never changes. Her parents have sided with Snape, and that is just heart wrenching. I've been there already. My parents took my hubby's side when we split up the first time. They took me in, but I hated that every time they spoke it was on his behalf. I eventually went home. Maybe that inspired this a little. As far as the type of man that he is, well, I've had the unfortunate experience of dating an arse like this. I always hoped that if i loved him enough and was good enough to him, that he would change his ways, love me in return, etc. That wasn't the case. That bad part? I'm one of the strongest, most willful people that I know. As smart as I may be, I let myself fall into that horrible rut. It did take awhile to get out of, but I did eventually leave it. Albus here reminds me of one of those that mean well but makes things worse types. Things will get better. I promise. Oh, I was upset about the book Snape as well, but I do believe there is more to that than meets the eye. | |||
| FJDS | 2005.07.27 - 01:45PM | 15: Full Circle | Signed |
| That was a great story. Didn't let me sleep last night, cause I always thought, allright, just one more chapter :-)
Really good ending as well, I liked the way you took the giggolo-story up again. And the way you made Snape change slowly... it seemed realistic. Thanks! Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much. i appreciate you taking the time to review! I thought it was a slow change as well. He did do a lot of growing, didnt he? cheers!! | |||
| Mouse | 2005.07.26 - 06:10PM | 15: Full Circle | Signed |
| What a lovely story. I think you ended it very well, my dear. Kudo's to yoi for a job well done. :D I thought it a nice touch that Sev gave the painting to his Mothers family. At least he didn't distroy it. I loved the part of him in the bathroom as her gigolo. That was rather wicked of him hehe. Loved that. lol Author's Response: Thanks, doll. You know, you are one of my oldest mates since I've been posting here at Ashwinder. thanks for sticking with me. lol i think the ending worked as well. Cheers, dear! | |||
| queenseverus | 2005.07.25 - 07:38PM | 15: Full Circle | Signed |
| a truly great fic Author's Response: thanks so much! i'm glad you enjoyed it | |||
| SeverusSnape | 2005.07.24 - 03:35PM | 15: Full Circle | Signed |
| I really enjoyed this story. I'm sorry to see it end. But it is a fantastic end and I congratulate you on a job well done! Author's Response: Thanks so much! I appreciate that you stayed with it :) | |||
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