Reviews for Marriage Vows
| Village Mystic | 2004.06.29 - 06:50PM | 28: Gathering the Evidence | Signed |
| Lovely plot in this chapter. I like the idea of Draco struggling not only with news about his father, but that he has an aunt that he's never heard of... and that even if worse comes to worst he'd be a welcome family member with a home to call his own. The dialog could have used a little more affectation or breaks to describe the body language or thoughts of the people in the room. |
| Julie | 2004.06.29 - 06:35PM | 14: Showing Affection | Signed |
| Oooo... I love that. Just wave a wand and you have extra room in your house. No contractors to deal with or other consturction hassels. You got to love these books with that thought alone. Now if it were only true to real alife!
P.s This story is GREAT! |
| Julie | 2004.06.29 - 05:42PM | 10: Marital Advice | Signed |
| This is great!!! Y ou are making Severus a husband and a Daddy all in the same day!!! I can't wait until they start adding to their little family!!! |
| Emma L. | 2004.06.29 - 04:28PM | 27: Sunday Lunch | Anonymous |
| Just read the last 3 chapters they are great. |
| just harry | 2004.06.29 - 03:20PM | 27: Sunday Lunch | Anonymous |
| your story just gets better and better i look forward to each new chaptor the people in the story are very believable |
| Ezmerelda | 2004.06.29 - 02:43PM | 27: Sunday Lunch | Signed |
| Leave it to the Prophet to publish such trash!
Severus' dialogue seems a little rushed, especially when he presents the jewel box to Hermione. I wish I could make a suggestion on how to fix it, but I just don't know how.
Thanks for writing! ~"~ |
| Ginny Tracy | 2004.06.29 - 01:32PM | 27: Sunday Lunch | Anonymous |
| This is a marvelously written story. You have a real gift for story-telling which I hope you will continue to use. I'm particularly impressed with the way you've taken the Marriage Law Challenge and turned it into something more than a vehicle for Hermionie-Severus snuggles and smut. (Not that there's anything wrong with that, I just like my stories to have a substantial helping of plot.)
The charaterizations of both Severus and Hermione are well within the bounds of reasonable extrapolations from canon, which is so seldom the case. Thanks for sharing your talent and imagination with us, I I hope we see more of htis story soon. |
| Village Mystic | 2004.06.29 - 12:56PM | 27: Sunday Lunch | Signed |
| An interesting and fast-paced chapter. Almost a little too fast paced for my tastes (liking more 5 senes description or internal thought), but good storytelling overall. |
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