Reviews for Marriage Vows
| Jade | 2004.08.20 - 10:28AM | 2: A Suitable Candidate | Anonymous |
| Lol! Thats funny how Hermione kept fainting, but Snape seems very OOC... Oh well! As long as the story is good, I don't mind. |
| Maddy Riddle | 2004.07.26 - 08:22AM | 32: Epilogue | Signed |
It's a lovely story. And you manage to write a Marriage Law fic without it been a copy of others. I like it a lot.
The only thing I see as a little problem is that you make characters explain the same thing several times (i.e. you had Maria's sorting and family explained to Maria, to her parents, to Draco, etc.). After the second of third time you read the same speech you get a bit annoyed by the repetition and slow pace it draw. Maybe it's better to simply say that they explain to the character in question what they new about the matter (without telling everything again). |
| pickles | 2004.07.17 - 06:40PM | 32: Epilogue | Anonymous |
| Hi
I enjoyed the story thoroughly. I'm sorry I didn't review each chapter, but i was so engrossed with the story i couldn't wait to get to the next chapter.
Now I have to go catch up on my housework. |
| pickles | 2004.07.16 - 01:13AM | 9: Doing the Muggle Thing | Anonymous |
| is maria severus daughter???? |
| DragonRose | 2004.07.11 - 12:58AM | 32: Epilogue | Signed |
| Excellent! You have such a great plot here with all the twists and turns added in to keep it interesting. The only thing I had trouble with was the dialogue. I think that it could improved upon by adding some emotion into it and identifying who is speaking when more than 2 people are talking. they was you have them apeaking to one another is almost robotic and ususally in a matter of fact kind of way. Improving upon that will also show your insight into the characters. It is not always obvious of whether or not you have a firm grasp of you character. Other than that, I would say it is a wonderful piece and I really am looking forward to reading the sequel. All those babies to be born and finding out how Draco fares is bound to be interesting! ^_^ Keep up the good work sweets! -DragonRose |
| Psycotic Pen | 2004.07.09 - 02:13PM | 32: Epilogue | Anonymous |
| I absolutly loved every minute of this story and cannot wait for the sequel. |
| DungeonPrincess | 2004.07.06 - 11:37AM | 32: Epilogue | Signed |
| I loved it. Something unique and never a dull moment with all the twists. I can't wait for the sequel.
~~Christy |
| Village Mystic | 2004.07.05 - 09:28PM | 32: Epilogue | Anonymous |
| Oh, very cool. Might you also consider a crossover romance instead of an OC for Draco? |
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