Reviews for Marriage Vows
| MerrinBeta | 2006.09.17 - 08:05AM | 32: Epilogue | Signed |
| Wow. I've spent the last couple of days reading this story and I'm simply overwhelmed by the beauty of it. Yes, it had some darkness, but that only served to make the light brighter. I'm looking forward now to going back and reading about Olivia. |
| Orl | 2006.09.15 - 11:49AM | 4: Engagements | Signed |
| Although I like the background story it seems to me to be a bit ooc for Snape to be so outgoing. It seemed more like a learned speech or lecture he was giving. Just a few hints would've maybe been enough and would have left us readers to puzzle about it. That would have given the story more tension. |
| Nimanoity | 2006.08.29 - 10:24AM | 32: Epilogue | Signed |
| Hey, this is a great fic. Lucius is so horrible, and I'm glad Draco isn't. Well written and very intriguing :) |
| startbynature | 2006.08.12 - 08:21AM | 8: Preparations | Signed |
| I like the plot, just a bit worried about the ooc Snape- hes not his usual man of few words and hard to understand - and where's his trademark THREE S's ? Scowling, Smirking and sarcasm!!!!
Liking the plot development though. |
| ohhhdear | 2006.07.28 - 02:39AM | 32: Epilogue | Signed |
| Very enjoyable read... thank you. Snape is more restrained and pleasant than canon expects him to be, perhaps, and more emotional. |
| Elianora | 2006.07.18 - 07:05PM | 10: Marital Advice | Signed |
| But didn't you say in an earlier chapter that Severus and Olivia were married 18 years ago and that she was 5 months pregnant when she was killed about a year after they got married? Wouldn't that make any child of theirs 16 or 17? So whose child is it? The intrigue! I just stumbled on this story in the Random Fic feature a couple of days ago and love it so far! Thank you. |
| meep7 | 2006.07.14 - 04:21PM | 22: The Hearing | Signed |
| you really had me worried! i absolutely adore this story...will fav at the end...simply marvelous! |
| Prospera | 2006.07.14 - 12:46PM | 8: Preparations | Signed |
| I love this story -- it's one of my favorites...but I wish you would break up these long paragraphs of people talking. It's unnatural. They don't have to be broken up with dialog. It would work to have things like "Arthur said" and descriptions of how the person someone was talking to was reacting: "Severus shook his head at that, and Mr Granger continued," etc.
I really do love the story though; I've read it several times,and I really do mean that as constructive criticism. Thank you so much for taking the time to write this!
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