Reviews for For Merlin's Sake
Roma | 2018.11.24 - 01:04PM | 1: For Merlin's Sake | Signed |
Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha! LOVE IT!!!!!! |
greysky8 | 2015.03.30 - 01:45AM | 1: For Merlin's Sake | Signed |
No kidding, eh?! |
loreen77 | 2014.08.31 - 11:11AM | 1: For Merlin's Sake | Signed |
Very funny! |
Lucretia123 | 2012.03.22 - 03:35PM | 1: For Merlin's Sake | Signed |
LMAO! |
Jenniemay | 2011.07.28 - 11:21PM | 1: For Merlin's Sake | Signed |
''"I'm tired of you always taking my virginity while you are...an inexperienced come Sex God in the making." What IS an 'inexperienced come Sex God' etc.? Seems to me your beta didn't quite finish the job here,''. I believe that it is meant as he doesn't have many lovers or is a virgin himself yet he knows exactly what to do to please Hermione. It is supposed to read that way. No one speaks proper english constantly. Not beta's fault here. Has anyone noted that there are rare FF's where Severus gets it wrong or nervous? It's hillarious. Put a smile on my face. G'night. 10 out of 10. |
lia francis | 2011.01.02 - 04:38PM | 1: For Merlin's Sake | Signed |
Genius. Made me laugh at myself this time. |
Jong_Kahn | 2010.11.02 - 10:57PM | 1: For Merlin's Sake | Signed |
I seem to recall having read this before, only not having reviewed it, so let me rectify that now. I was fine until the last couple sentences: "I'm tired of you always taking my virginity while you are...an inexperienced come Sex God in the making." What IS an 'inexperienced come Sex God' etc.? Seems to me your beta didn't quite finish the job here, what with the misplaced 'come' in the middle of a phrase--no pun intended either, so let's just talk syntax here, please! The other spot is that last paragraph: " 'Let me know when you...yes, you reading this...when you can come up with something a bit more original,' Hermione said, as she stormed out of the Slytherin green bedroom." So you're breaking down the fourth wall here--that's very good, except I'm not sure it quite worked, especially with the previous paragraph's odd phrase there. Still--it was a fun idea, and I'm glad I read it. Thanks for your work (though it'd work even better with that next-to-last misphrasing cleaned up_. |
Tangerine Dream | 2010.01.23 - 09:51AM | 1: For Merlin's Sake | Signed |
Absolutely Brilliant!! |
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