Reviews for One More Time
| Severed | 2016.05.19 - 10:56PM | 1: One more time | Signed |
| I think there could have been a lot more done with this story. It seemed rushed and missing a lot of background information. The bad grammar made this story nearly impossible to get through. |
| Logbrandur | 2011.10.03 - 12:37PM | 1: One more time | Signed |
| I think there would have been potential. But the story develops way too rashly. You should have taken more time to explain the extent of their previous friendship as well as to reestablish the intimacy between Severus and Hermione. I would really have liked the Nickname thing if there would have been further explanation. |
| itchyfoot | 2008.06.05 - 06:05PM | 1: One more time | Signed |
| Sweet story about hope and love. It reminded me of watching "It's A Wonderful Life". |
| Kuronekosama_KK | 2006.02.05 - 04:27AM | 1: One more time | Signed |
| Well... it was borderline bad. Very very little substance to speak of, the bare bones are there, but not much else. The characters are very OOC, the nickname thing should not exist. It's just... it's bad enough to make me not want to look up and reread the fic to point out specific parts that could be greatly improved upon. The only saving grace that I can think of is maybe the spelling. Maybe, I'm to scared to look up and verify it. |
| Daintress | 2005.11.05 - 12:40PM | 1: One more time | Signed |
| You've confused the word "being" with the word "been." Multiple times. I've really got to think to make it through the story. Also, at the point of their reunion, you've given them an intimacy that I think it would be odd for them to share if they'd only spent one night comforting one another after Ron's death, as you seemed to indicate previously. The story just doesn't flow quite right as a result. |
| Becky | 2004.12.22 - 05:28PM | 1: One more time | Signed |
| ah I love it,It is a great one shot.. good job |
| Tessa | 2003.11.26 - 10:49PM | 1: One more time | Anonymous |
| This story was so sweet I instantly got a toothache... That's not to say it wasn't nice, but I would have known what to expect if you'd've put it in "fluff"... |
| Maddy Riddle | 2003.11.24 - 09:34PM | 1: One more time | Signed |
| That was a good little story! I like it a lot (you almost makes me cry). |
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