Reviews for He
| loreen77 | 2015.11.08 - 09:48AM | 1: Chapter One | Signed |
| Another lovely poem. |
| Buggy | 2012.05.09 - 11:19PM | 1: Chapter One | Signed |
| omg, that was so stunning. |
| ebony | 2005.07.08 - 04:34PM | 1: Chapter One | Anonymous |
| Help me, I'm drowning!!!! |
| amsev | 2005.04.24 - 06:34AM | 1: Chapter One | Signed |
| duh, never mind -- I cruised down further on your list of fics and found "She". (a little slow at this hour of the morning....) |
| amsev | 2005.04.24 - 06:32AM | 1: Chapter One | Signed |
| I like this poem very, very much.
If I were to do "anything" to it, it would be to break up the longer lines so that the flow is continuous in context with the shorter phrases. Ex: She is the reason / He returns / Battered / And worn / Bleeding / And torn / For her / To her / His redemption.
This is just awesome. Everytime I read it, it sings even more! How about a sequel: "She"? |
| Ella Greendive | 2005.01.01 - 10:06AM | 1: Chapter One | Signed |
| Imaginative writing and nice use of language - clearly very able writer. A bit choppy in places - I liked the more elaborate lines. |
| droxy | 2004.10.05 - 09:31PM | 1: Chapter One | Anonymous |
| very nice, gives me a feeling of needy aprehension |
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