Reviews for Factual Images
Plebia | 2008.07.22 - 12:12AM | 1: Once upon a time....and the end. | Signed |
you really need to work on your dialogue, and it's 'private', not 'privet.' Not a bad story, but you shouldn't rush it so much. Why did Hermione see bad images in the mirror, etc. |
Kelly | 2006.09.17 - 03:49PM | 1: Once upon a time....and the end. | Anonymous |
Not too bad in the OOC department, but you should really check your spelling. 'private' in stead of 'privet', 'savior' instead of 'savor' etc. |
Volatilis | 2006.04.16 - 05:21PM | 1: Once upon a time....and the end. | Signed |
Incredible, that was your first? I'd never have guessed. Snape might have been a little OOC (he told hermione what he saw awfully fast and awfully truthfully) but overall very well done everything else (his persona) seemed to be in order. Here's a Nine for you. |
kimjo2 | 2006.04.13 - 04:08PM | 1: Once upon a time....and the end. | Signed |
i enjoyed it alot and i wish you would continue on. thank you. |
Silver Angel | 2006.04.07 - 01:43AM | 1: Once upon a time....and the end. | Signed |
It was a good story, a wonderful idea... but you're right, the characters were a little OOC and a little jumpy. But still, I really do like this story nonetheless!!! |
Quasi | 2005.07.07 - 03:05PM | 1: Once upon a time....and the end. | Signed |
An excellent story. Don't sell yourself short . A great read ! |
Lola | 2005.05.06 - 10:40PM | 1: Once upon a time....and the end. | Anonymous |
Good writing, but Hermione was much more OOC than Snape... |
Dryad | 2004.05.25 - 12:48PM | 1: Once upon a time....and the end. | Signed |
We all have varying OOCness in our characters...i wouldn't concern myself with it too much...but you have me very curious...i hope you continue it...i mean...why would the mirror show her deepest fear? Does she find a way to make the mark disappear? Do they shag?? *laugh*
Thanks for hte read!
Author's Response: :) I'm really glad you read it, and liked it as well... I'm not sure if I CAN continue it, but it was really fun to write. And of course they would shag later on!- that is if I continued it. Thanks! -MelissaAdams- |
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