Reviews for Escape from the Darkness
| loreen77 | 2016.09.28 - 07:15PM | 15: Chapter 15 | Signed |
| Great job, I enjoyed this a lot. |
| loreen77 | 2016.09.26 - 08:39PM | 1: Chapter 1 | Signed |
| I like this idea. I look forward to seeing where you take this. |
| bubbles28 | 2014.08.11 - 12:41AM | 14: Chapter 14 | Signed |
| Was there a text jump?
"However, before they reached the Great Hall, there were already Death Eaters in the building. Her heart sunk and she felt ready to be sick. How had they gotten past the wards so easily? Hogwarts was her sanctuary, the one place she always felt safe. But <--- right there...to go immediately into ->>>
McGonagall quickly pointed her wand screamed “Protego!” to deflect the yellow light that was coming in their direction from a masked Death Eater. It was amazing how quick her reflexes were. She ordered the fifth year prefects, in addition to several teachers who were to stay with the younger students for protection, to use a back staircase. They obeyed without question"....seemed strange |
| bubbles28 | 2014.08.11 - 12:35AM | 13: Chapter 13 | Signed |
| Nice, the writing is tighter in this chapter, though hell on wheels, "that escalated quickly." |
| bubbles28 | 2014.08.11 - 12:28AM | 12: Chapter 12 | Signed |
| I feel like the writing style in the last few chapters changed significantly from the writing in the first few, which felt much more developed stylistically. As soon as Severus and Hermione admitted to their feelings, the plot construction broke down significantly; I thought the dynamics between Severus and Hermione were rather rushed without much attention to detail. I also didn't like the way McGonagall phrased what she said at the beginning of the chapter...all students shouldn't be taken advantage of, though I know you didn't mean anything like that, it still rankled. Plus Hermione and Severus seemed to act really out of character around the relationship. Highly irrational and unreasonable, but perhaps that's intentional, to underline their intense emotions...
I don't mean to be overly critical, I really do like this story, and intend to finish it, but I wanted to comment. |
| tietjens | 2013.01.08 - 12:41PM | 9: Chapter 9 | Signed |
| This story is sheer pleasure to read! Thank you so much for writing it! |
| ALIKUMA | 2012.08.10 - 09:06PM | 11: Chapter 11 | Signed |
| Oh dang! Busted!!! |
| Montara | 2012.03.23 - 02:09PM | 15: Chapter 15 | Signed |
| Loved it. Thank you. |
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