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| kass42 | 2018.07.22 - 09:38PM | 22: Everything Coming Together | Signed |
| Great chapter! | |||
| loreen77 | 2018.07.22 - 07:34AM | 22: Everything Coming Together | Signed |
| That was immensely satisfying. So sweet but honest and raw. It was one of the best “first time together” scenes I have ever read. I loved the way you were able to convey their emotions, love and insecurity. Very authentic. The fact that you used the phrase ‘happy trail’ made me laught out loud. It made me think of my high school days gossiping with other girls about some boy with his shirt off. I wonder if the younger kids even know that phrase anymore? Thank you for an amazing story overall but also for what is my favorite chapter you have written!! Author's Response: See... that's what happens when you have a German writing in English! I had no idea that 'happy trail' is probably not a modern, adult or common expression. In fact, there is no German word for it, I think we simply use the English one. I don't even rembember where I came across it - certainly not in my English classes ;) I think it was in a movie or TV series... was it Vampire Diaries? Quite possible. That would explain why it made you think of high school. Now I wonder - is there a more modern or adult expression? It'd be a pity, because I think it's a really nice and descriptive word for it. But I guess nowadays guys all shave (and shave ALL), so maybe they don't even have a happy trail anymore? Okay, probably not a toppic we should discuss here ;) Anyway, I'm very, very happy that you liked the chapter. Generally, I'm most interested in what goes on in peoples' minds - not only in these scenes. After all, that's what makes the difference between a book and a movie. Having both - a movie to watch and the according book to read, is the best of both worlds - like vanilla icecream with chocolate sauce. I guess that's why I love fanfiction so much. My heartfelt thanks to you for being such a faithful reader and reviewer! It means a lot to me! | |||
| Ghislaine | 2018.07.21 - 01:02PM | 22: Everything Coming Together | Signed |
| This was so much better and sweeter than I could ever have imagined. Hermione saying that they would learn from each other how to overcome their different insecurities was the perfect way to explain why they will make each other happy. I loved reading that Severus is now admired by the students, after so many years of being feared. I look forward eagerly to the epilogues. I did notice that a word was left out in the sentence, "His breath had caught when she had vanished her school earlier in the evening." I think you meant to say school ROBES. Oh, and I enjoyed the image of those school robes turning into a flock of birds and flying away. That would have made a wonderful scene in the film. Thank you so much for this. It's been a joy to read. Author's Response: Thank you, Ghislaine, for your review and for telling me about the missing word. I corrected it right away. Sadly, this often happens when I edit a text, and no matter how often I re-read everything afterwards, these things often escape my notice. I'm glad that you liked the ending of the story. I can promise more sweetness in the epilogue, which is admittedly full of fluff. :) Thank you for being such a faithful reader and reviewer! | |||
| AussieWolf | 2018.07.15 - 05:19PM | 20: Future Plans | Signed |
| It occurred to me that I haven't reviewed your story yet and I'm very sorry for that. I'm really enjoying it and eager to see how far it goes! Author's Response: Well, it goes as far as one more chapter and two epilogues, but Hermione and Severus will go all the way. :) Just don't expect anything too lemony... I've been trying to be subtle with my descriptions... :D I don't feel too comfortable with writing very explicit stuff, though there might be something a bit more kinky coming in a one-shot eventually... :) Thank you for reviewing! I appreciate every comment! | |||
| loreen77 | 2018.07.13 - 10:29PM | 21: What Happens on Graduation Day | Signed |
| Anticipation is an amaIng aphrodisiac. I love the idea of birds made of their robes flying away. I think the imagery that creates is beautiful. It’s such a unique and poetic idea. I eagerly await graduation day! | |||
| Ghislaine | 2018.07.13 - 12:55AM | 21: What Happens on Graduation Day | Signed |
| What a lovely image of Hermione sitting among the Moon Dew flowers, and how typical of Severus to have invented his own method of harvesting the dew. I'm anxious to read your description of the students transfiguring their robes to fly away. Now I'm looking forward to graduation as much as Hermione is! Real life has been difficult lately, so I was thrilled to log on and find this new chapter waiting for me. Author's Response: I'm glad you liked my ideas about the leaving ceremony. It won't be very prominent in the next chapter, though, as it will focus more on what happens afterwards :) I assume that this is okay with the most of you... | |||
| DarkenCoul | 2018.07.01 - 12:00PM | 4: Occlumency the First | Signed |
| I'm not sure what else I could say that I haven't already said, but goodness you just have such a way with words! First I love how you described occlumency, it's makes much more sense than simply blocking and further explains why it was so difficult to teach Harry. It's unfortunate that it wasn't explored more in the books, but then again, it means there's more for fanfic authors to play with.
What he experienced in her mind, how she's feeling and dealing with her friends and why she can't turn to any of them is all so very Hermione. It's easy to picture her as being that person, the sounding board for everyone, she was always more mature and so seems the one that it would be most natural for them all to turn to. Not thinking of everything she'd been through and was feeling because to them, it's almost like she was above it all, or better able to sort through her feelings. When in reality, just because something is more logical and mature in their reasoning, doesn't mean they know any better how to deal with their emotions. Being mature doesn't make up for lack of experience and the years someone's been alive can only do so much. Some things simply must be learned the hard way and dealt with for the lessons to sink in. I love how Snape is being, so true to character, and yet with the undercurrent of tension, it's like you can feel that his foundation is shifting about, and he feels it to and isn't sure how to deal with it. Falling back on habit will only get him so far before he's going to have to sit down and have a good think and come to new understandings and realizations, not just about himself, but about Hermione too. This is the kind of story that I can read multiple times and each time notice something I didn't before or understand something in a new way. To really catch all the nuances, I think I'll have to read it a dozen times, at least. I don't mind. :-) Author's Response: I surely won't tire of reading you reviews, and admittedly, I read them more than once! :) I love how much thought you give to every detail while reading, and how deeply you're analyzing the story / the characters in order to give me feedback. Snape's character is one of the most interesting ones in HP, and like with the mind arts, JKR gave us much to play with. :) I've seen him in many stories; some portrayals more convincing than others, but a lot of authors manage to write him convincingly, but altogether differently. Mine is just the version I prefer him to be - an exterior that only reflects the surface, but doesn't show even a third of the depth behind. I'm happy that you like 'my' Snape! I totally agree with everything you said about maturity and dealing with emotions in your review, by the way. :) | |||
| loreen77 | 2018.06.23 - 02:44PM | 20: Future Plans | Signed |
| I love the idea of the unspeakable job. It fits her so well. | |||
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