Reviews for Heavenly Angel
| SevsAngel | 2004.05.17 - 10:43PM | 9: 9 | Signed |
| I love how this story is coming along.
Poor Sev. Meeting the parents has got to be tough.
I think this story is original and very well written, I cant wait to read more.
Please...continue...
Casandra
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| Rosie | 2004.05.01 - 06:53PM | 9: 9 | Signed |
Right, love your story but I have to point something out.
"Mrs. Weasley shook her head and drank her tea. She lowered her cup" |
| Amber Snape | 2004.05.01 - 11:13AM | 9: 9 | Signed |
| Very good. I am enjoying this story a lot. I think this chapter is especally well written. I like the fact that Severus faints. He is so used to keeping to himself that when forced to answer a very personel question his body shuts down. And the gifts were inspired. I would like to point out that you left out the word pipe when discribing Mr Granger early on and you refered to Mrs Granger as Mrs Weasly at the end other than that it is very well written, and I can't wait to see more. |
| Chantal | 2004.05.01 - 07:54AM | 9: 9 | Signed |
| I think this is a very original, humorous story! I love the way you write Ginny, especially. She's not too shrill, but is still "in charge" when need be. In regards to your concerns for the last chapter, you could try using html codes like for bold or for italics. Then when you're done typing the part you want formatted just end it with or and the type is back to normal. I use that when I write thoughts, letters and flashbacks. I thought you did a good job though. I understood what each was thinking as you wrote it. I also wanted to point out that you wrote "Mrs. Weasley" instead of "Mrs. Granger" at the end of the chapter when she was talking with Snape. I think this is a great story and I can't wait to find out what happens next in Hermione and Severus' "courtship". |
| Titania | 2004.05.01 - 06:28AM | 9: 9 | Signed |
| I'm not quite sure which line in this chapter was my favorite, so I am going to have to call the entire chapter the best one yet. Loved the reparte between Ron, Ginny and Severus. I actually laughed out loud at the "how can you tell?' bit but by far Ginny's "proceeded to faint at their feet when confronted with tea." was a coffee spitter! I really must refrain from drinking coffee when reading your work. Great sense of humor you have and I like your writing style. I am looking forward to the next chapter, which I hope won't be too long in coming. Until then, live long and prosper! Titania |
| alicat | 2004.05.01 - 05:59AM | 9: 9 | Signed |
| I totally loved this chapter I was actually laughing out loud at my PC and got totally jarred for it cause my partner was trying to watch the footy but it was well woth it hope you update soon :) |
| Pandora Nervosa | 2004.04.26 - 01:59AM | 8: 8 | Signed |
| This story is adorable! It's the first time I've gotten to read it and I'm very impressed. I'm anxious to hear the Rules of Wizarding Courtship. They should prove to be very entertaining. Thank you for sharing your story. |
| Azulkan2 | 2004.04.23 - 11:40PM | 8: 8 | Signed |
| This is great. It's funny how ackward they both are. And ginnys charm. Good thing they found uses for all the rosemary. |
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