Reviews for The Apprentice
| Brooklynhills97 | 2018.02.18 - 03:27AM | 1: | Signed |
| This is really dark and Albus is a complete cold jerk her also Severus. Please continue |
| Brooklynhills97 | 2018.02.12 - 05:12PM | 1: | Signed |
| Please continue!!! I want more!!! Please!!!! |
| Nickey1903 | 2017.09.30 - 08:36PM | 1: Chapter 1 | Signed |
| Is this it??? I want more |
| AussieWolf | 2014.07.06 - 07:55PM | 1: | Signed |
| I'm afraid this one is just too dark for me. A warning for rape, graphic violence, and genital mutilation would be a kind service to your readers... |
| FelixGreen | 2014.07.02 - 02:26PM | 1: | Signed |
| Intense! Eager to see what's next |
| Derelict Author | 2014.06.30 - 09:05AM | 1: | Signed |
| Lack of context makes this seem a bit jilted, though I'm sure plot and flow will come as the story continues. Wording is a bit wooden, as well, with some run ons and odd syntax--is English your second language? If so, you have a good grasp that just needs a little work to read smoother. The last scene in Chapter 2 is pretty disgusting but is certainly interesting imagery! |
| Jong_Kahn | 2014.06.26 - 02:07PM | 1: | Signed |
| Who's he going to convey that "best plan" to? Dumbledore, or Voldemort? |
| Jong_Kahn | 2014.06.26 - 01:53PM | 1: Chapter 1 | Signed |
| Wow--what a premise. I await more with bated breath! |
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