Reviews for The Heir
verasuspense | 2012.09.15 - 02:40PM | 12: Water under the Bridge | Signed |
Oh dear.
Author's Response: Oh dear oh dear :-) thanks |
lovesev | 2012.09.15 - 04:30AM | 12: Water under the Bridge | Signed |
Hope Hermione doesn't get taken to Belatrix. This chapter had me scared for them the entire time. Great story! Please update soon.
Author's Response: Thank you! I updated this between two weeks of "away", so you have at least a week for the next! sorry, but Il try to make them longer:-) |
Proulxes | 2012.09.15 - 02:49AM | 12: Water under the Bridge | Signed |
This story is growing more and more complex and interesting with every chapter. Loved the atmospheric description of Bill and Hermione's meeting place, the tension in their words, and the slick thrill of fear that you generated right from the start as you made sure that the reader knew they were being watched... and we are beginning to see a little more explanation about H's motives. Fascinated by the fisherman (obviously I had assumed it was Snape until the BRILLIANT final stanza). More please - this chapter was hugely intriguing and highly enjoyable.
Author's Response: Thank you! The story is advancing, and at the end the reader is supposed to understand how "all this came to be", but there is some way to go, still. And I did play with words a little this time, to make up for all the kicking.... thanks again |
Nerdlee | 2012.09.08 - 12:17AM | 11: But Not In Health | Signed |
Poetry in abstract beauty.
~Mis
Author's Response: I don't even dare to believe you saw what I put in, but I was sure nobody would notice. So on the off-chance you really commented on my story and it was not a mistake, my most heartfelt thanks for deep reading, and letting me know :-) |
iris m | 2012.09.07 - 01:13PM | 11: But Not In Health | Signed |
wow what the nut-nut is going to happen next....poor sev. I just love him :)
Author's Response: Thank you. I like it that you convey strong feelings without profanity. As to Sev... he's in for it.
Believe you me:-) |
Jong_Kahn | 2012.09.05 - 11:04PM | 11: But Not In Health | Signed |
So Emery can giggle with Daddy, suck on Mommy, but not mind at all that Daddy treats Mommy like shit? Most children who see their moms emotionally abused are confused and not happy about that situation. Your plotting keeps me at least interested in this story; I keep trying to like it. But I can't get past your Severus. There's nothing romantic or sexy about an abusive asshole in my book. And that Emery doesn't seem to have any tension about the unfair treatment to his mom doesn't ring true to me. I still appreciate the work you do; it takes time to write, and you do have an imagination. So I give you credit, even if it is "damning with faint praise"!
Author's Response: WOW. 1. you're right, Em would be disturbed, that's why I explained he was engrossed in his game, and Snape blocked his vision. It wasn't clear enough from your reaction, so I edited it to dissipate any doubts. Thanks for the input. 2. Even then, remember that,for weeks, his primary caretaker is not H anymore , but S/Ginny. Ask any mother who's spent time hospitalized or abroad, the 1-yr-old first reaction when she comes back is to rush into the nanny's arms. (it's widely written about in the prof. journals).
3.As to S's character... I'm saddened that I am apparently not good enough a writer to express his inner turmoil, think of a 6-yr-oldpulling the ponytail of the girl he likes. But no, he's not nice, or straightforward romantic or sexy. He's definitely, at least at this point, a tragic, flawed character. His bonding with Em is already borderline OOC. I you look at his actions... no. wait for next chapter, H will explain it better than I. Thanks. I'll work harder.
Author's Response: Btw, one of the reasons I kept him nursing was so he wouldn't have to get used to her again from scratch... to complicated a subplot.
Author's Response: One little detail: at no point in the story (yet?) has Em seen S behaving badly to H. Here it's happening in 2 different rooms. |
Insolence | 2012.09.05 - 08:25PM | 11: But Not In Health | Signed |
What can I say? I like Legilimency in fanfiction.
Put it up. All except the boots, that is - if he didn't Avada himself over that particular stunt... I would. :P
Author's Response: Just had to ask :-) I put in what I thought would not endanger the flow... I do think he's a closet romantic... if the closet is five floors underground. And he's definitely in love with her, in his immature twisted way, and I'm really happy you saw it, too. |
lovesev | 2012.09.05 - 05:10AM | 11: But Not In Health | Signed |
So excited to see another chapter up!! This is one of the best written stories out there. Can't wait for another update.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot.
I must say, getting reviews like yours is definitely good for the Muse, too. Update currently being updated. It's... different, though. A little. |
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