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loreen772012.05.25 - 08:12PM1: Signed
It is unfortunate that they can not find common ground, but I think in real life when peole stray and cheat it end things more often than couples 'work through it". we all love our "happy endings" but sometimes they just don't fit the story. I respect your choice, but I worry if Hermione does not find a way to let go of some of the anger that she will take it out on her child (even in a subconscious emotionally detached sort of way). Also how do you raise and send a child to school at some point in time if you are sequestered and hidden? I would be curious to read a third installment that shows how you envision this going in 3 years or 11 years.... Well written and thoughtprovoking.

Grace523732012.05.16 - 10:47PM1: Signed
I didn't mean that in a bad way, (I hate angst!) I should have tacked on lol or something. I don't mind reading angst, but I do prefer when it's worked out in the end. It doesn't have to be a happy ending, but people willing to work together with a chance to rebuild things is good enough for me. I disagree that this is reality. I know that not everything is roses and sunshine, but I also know that people often put there children first. I also know that if they are incapable of seeing past their anger, that they have loved ones, or friends who are able to help them see reason. Maybe for now this is their reality, but someone should step in for the child's sake. I often balk when people say this is reality, and reality is ugly, and cruel. If that were the case, than none of us would be happy. I guess this affected me so strongly, because my father died a few years ago, and I would have been devastated if I had been denied the chance to know him, even if he did something stupid. Also, my godchild's father has abandoned her, and barely talks to her since he has gotten married and has a new baby, so the thought that someone would deliberatly keep a parent that wants to be involved in their child's life, which can be a rarity, just sticks in my craw. Hermione should be grateful for that, even if her anger won't let her see that. I know you can't see a "happy ending" here, but people have gotten over adultry, and have even reconciled. I don't know what I would do in that situation, but I don't judge others. I sorry about sounding so harsh. It just seemed that after having the child, I thought Hermione would have matured, and put her anger aside for the child. It is hard to do that, but you have to put that child first. They are a priority, and that child will resent being kept from it's father eventually.

Author's Response: Maybe this isn't reality for everyone, but it does exist; I can attest to that personally, having gone through a similar experience myself. I agree that, eventually, these two will manage to work something out. Hermione will not keep her child from its father forever, though I feel she is justified in doing so up to this point. She's suffered from the emotional blow of having her marriage end, and then had to go through the hardships of pregnancy. Once she stabilizes and can see things from a more rational point of view, she'll take steps to fix things; I just can't write those bits and have them sound reasonable. I really do appreciate the time you've taken in writing me, and I only hope that I've managed to explain things a little more clearly.

deedeebug952012.05.16 - 09:59AM1: Signed
I like both of your stories! I respect your right as the author to finish in the story in such an open ended way. However as a divorced parent whose child looks just like my ex I will tell you I never looked at my child in anger because of his father.Keep writing I will keep reading!!! Oh and I LOVE Gotye!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you! :) She's definitely NOT angry at her child, just at herself for being so emotional and at her situation in general.

Grace523732012.05.11 - 01:49AM1: Signed
I hate angst! Has Hermione even heard of the word forgiveness? If not for her sake, at least for her child's sake, because that kid will hate her for this! I wish you would write more, where Severus finds them and establishes a relationship with his child,because she has no right to keep that child from him. I understand that she feels angry and betrayed, but people have overcome this, and you have to overcome this for your child's sake, because they need both their parents. Severus is not abusive, and he is capable of love. It isn;t fair that his child is growing up with a bitter shrew and two guys who will fill this kids head with lies about his dad. It's just not right,

Author's Response: I thank you for taking the time to review. Your opinions are definitely valid here, but I would encourage you to avoid angst in the future if it bothers you so. I cannot write a neat, happy ending here, and unfortunately, situations such as this happen far too often. Though if you'd prefer, you are certainly welcome to imagine a better ending!

Snype Snape2012.05.11 - 01:26AM1: Signed
I like both of these stories - this one and its predecessor. They are real. Very sad stories, but real nonetheless. They remind the reader that Life is not always Roses and Rainbows. Thank you for sharing.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! You seem to understand exactly what I was trying to portray. :)

Lucretia1232012.05.11 - 12:27AM1: Signed
Ohhhhh! Please, need more! Love the story! Please don't leave us hanging!

Author's Response: Thank you such enthusiasm! Unfortunately, I just cannot write any more to this. I'm satisfied with what I managed here, and anything else just wouldn't feel right.

Jong_Kahn2012.05.10 - 11:08PM1: Signed
Well. I like the 'snapshot' aspect of this ficlet. You capture in a nutshell what happened here, even if one wishes you'd answer more of the questions you raise than you do. I liked what you wrote, but I feel the addition of the song lyrics actually detracts from your story. They seem hung onto the end, like a shingle, something from the outside that didn't grow organically from YOUR mind. Please understand that it's just "MHO" as they say. I hardly ever like someone else's lyrics tagged on to any story. They're usually not very good poetry in the first place, and they hardly ever REALLY match up to the story they're appended to. So: YOUR FICLET: 1, SONG LYRICS: 0. Thanks for this sequel, even if it's an angsty ending.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I definitely understand your point about the lyrics, and I generally agree with you. But writing this little snippet would have been utterly impossible were it not for this song. I felt like I had to include them, if only to acknowledge that my ideas here didn't just come out of nowhere.

severus492012.05.10 - 10:57PM1: Signed
Ah, two of my favorite loves. Gotye (Oh, that Wally!) and Severus! I'm in heaven!!!

Author's Response: I'm glad I could combine them for you. ;)

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