Reviews for A Terrible Temptation
Joannie | 2023.07.17 - 01:09PM | 28: Simple Solutions | Signed |
As noted by another review, that was a bit of a jump from the doorway to the comfortable exchange of ideas. The reader does not understand how it came about. Was there hesitancy? I would think so - especially on the part of Severus. Hermione - maybe not so much - she might not have thought about the repercussions, but Severus would have certainly. Aside from that, it is a wonderful story and a fresh take on Ron’s character. I especially enjoyed seeing Snape’s feelings while he was ‘Harry’. As an author, I know there is a fine line to walk given the nature of these two main characters. Even so, that scene lounging comfortably on the couch, enjoy each other’s company, needed a wee bit of a backstory. This is in no way meant to be critical. Joannie
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Joannie | 2023.07.17 - 01:09PM | 28: Simple Solutions | Signed |
As noted by another review, that was a bit of a jump from the doorway to the comfortable exchange of ideas. The reader does not understand how it came about. Was there hesitancy? I would think so - especially on the part of Severus. Hermione - maybe not so much - she might not have thought about the repercussions, but Severus would have certainly. Aside from that, it is a wonderful story and a fresh take on Ron’s character. I especially enjoyed seeing Snape’s feelings while he was ‘Harry’. As an author, I know there is a fine line to walk given the nature of these two main characters. Even so, that scene lounging comfortably on the couch, enjoy each other’s company, needed a wee bit of a backstory. This is in no way meant to be critical. Joannie
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Joannie | 2023.07.16 - 04:32PM | 23: Tempting Fate | Signed |
Utterly enthralled with your story. I was not going to mention this…that is…until I saw a review by zentaria saying that “to learn” was a prepositional phrase. True it is a prepositional phrase, but it is also the infinitive verb form of “learn”.
I think your story is well-written, and I have read many. There are stories on this site that I start and can not finish because of incorrect grammar and word usage. Makes me wonder how they get past the admins - they are strict gatekeepers. |
3Rapunzel | 2022.12.22 - 11:51PM | 44: Epilogue | Signed |
Some very funny moments but Hermione would of figured out the body swap in the first few chapters. |
3Rapunzel | 2022.12.22 - 11:50PM | 44: Epilogue | Signed |
Some very funny moments but Hermione would of figured out the body swap in the first few chapters. |
phantomofhogwarts | 2021.10.07 - 12:05PM | 22: One of These Just Doesn’t Belong | Signed |
Hello there! I had planned on reading this through and commenting at the end, but just had to stop here and review. I am LOVING your story. It it so wonderful to get to see Severus loosening up and all but I just love how you are writing Ron! As Severus said he never was stupid just...a bit thoughtless and reckless sometimes. Cannot wait to see what continues to happen! |
ickle_cat | 2021.02.09 - 06:15PM | 44: Epilogue | Signed |
it got a little bit fluffy at the end but was such a good story that i read it despite thinking i had probably already read it a while ago! |
coolarrow7 | 2021.02.01 - 07:16PM | 44: Epilogue | Signed |
I hit random fiction and was awarded this wonderful story and it has instantly become my favorite! Reading about an insightful and intelligent Ron was a breath of fresh air!! |
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