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| CheekyTart | 2011.10.02 - 10:27PM | 1: | Signed |
| This is going very well...almost too well. You're making me nervous. ;) As concerns the whole hymen debate, I had the exact same experience as your Hermione. I have always wondered if I'm some sort of freak of nature, but it is possible. I am thoroughly enjoing your depictions of S&H, it's refreshing! Author's Response: Thank god! I thought I was a freak too! As for making you nervous, you should be! I am glad you are enjoying it and I hope you continue to enjoy xx | |||
| tasmanikus | 2011.10.02 - 10:37AM | 1: | Signed |
| absolutely love the story, can't wait for the next chapter, please update soon :) Author's Response: As soon as u get it back from my beta, the next chapter will be up. Great to hear you are enjoying it so much. | |||
| MeliJ | 2011.09.29 - 09:50PM | 1: | Signed |
| I think you're doing a great job. They seem so open though for having just gotten married without really knowing eachother. I did like the lake scene; it was very relaxjng and seemed a bit liberating for them. Looking forward to the next chapter :) Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I am glad you are enjoying the story. I am trying to highlight that a relaxed atmosphere will create a relaxed couple. And therefore a tense atmosphere may turn things on their head. | |||
| winters | 2011.09.29 - 06:48PM | 1: | Signed |
| Ok, you have been added to my favorites. Wonderfully written. You have kept the key aspects of both Hermione and Severus character but with more depth. Especially Severus. All Gryffindors are not brash and reactionary like Harry & Ron. Some are respectful and brave in a thoughtful way such as Hermione and Neville. I love the time you are taking to develope their relationship . Author's Response: You have just described exactly what I was aiming for with these.characters! Thank you very much, and I hope my writing continues to impress you. | |||
| Snejp | 2011.09.29 - 02:30PM | 1: | Signed |
| This is, without a doubt, my favorite Hermione/Snape story ever. Wonderfully written. Can't wait to read more. Author's Response: Woah! That is the biggest complement a writer could ever receive! I hope it continues to live up to your expectations. | |||
| Sevvy253 | 2011.09.29 - 11:01AM | 1: | Signed |
| BTW: I meant to say in my review that I'm happy for you to use me as a 'back up' beta anytime - just let me know :-) Author's Response: Thank you for the offer. I will keep you in mind :) | |||
| Sevvy253 | 2011.09.29 - 09:19AM | 1: | Signed |
| Hmmm ... I quite like the idea of Snape the gynaecologist! ;-) But, seriously, it's really nice to read of an understanding, considerate Snape -- & why shouldn't he be? This was a man who felt so deeply about a woman once that he carried a torch for her for the rest of his life & never loved another ... &, whilst I love a dominant outwardly 'hard' Snape, I don't see why he always has to be depicted as the mean-spirited selfish bastard who'd treat his new bride meanly. And I love your realism - the fact that Hermione's feeling discomfort after her first experiences of sex, rather than it having suddenly turned her into the rampant insatiable nymphomaniac that most often happens is a refreshing change! Looking forward to more :-) Author's Response: Maintaining my realism is something that I think is really important so I am glad you approve. I believe that a relaxed atmosphere would create a relaxed couple and visa versa. Hope you continue to enjoy! | |||
| Sevvy253 | 2011.09.29 - 09:03AM | 1: | Signed |
| Hi Dani, I would have reviewed this sooner but I've been in bed this past week with some kind of flu virus thing. However, even having had the advantage/privilege of a 'preview', I still wanted to comment again as it really is good! I think you did a very, very good job of expressing the nerves/realism involved in Hermione's first sexual encounter & a great attempt at the 'lemons' in general. I also think you expressed Snape's POV well; I honestly don't think he would be the uncaring 'monster' so many write him as but, equally, he would have his own fears & doubts which you also managed to get across.
I also liked the fact that you didn't use too many 'crude' words - so many authors have no idea how they can spoil a 'romantic' scene by doing this. Of course there is a time & place for everything &, in some fics, you pretty much need it. But I reckon you got the tone/balance right in this :-) And, despite it being an arranged marriage in which neither of them have had any choice, you have still somehow managed to create a romantic air to it all, e.g: 'Her hand was being held in his, and she felt the differences between their palms, small to large, soft to hard, shaking to steady.' - Not only was that my favourite line of this chapter but it was also devine! And I did look up the song on youtube - lovely words, as with all ALW's stuff :-)
Author's Response: Thanks again for your kind words and praise. I love that my writing is able to connect with you the way you say it does. Also, thanks for making the effort to look up the song, when you can hear it in your head I really feel it adds an extra dimension to the scene. | |||
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