Reviews for Confluence of Truths
| Jong_Kahn | 2021.06.16 - 02:15AM | 24: The Very End | Signed |
| "Whilom", I am guessing, is meant to be pronounced like "Willem", rather than "WHILE-ohm"? Well, no matter. You worked long and hard on this story, and I appreciated having a nice long juicy story of many chapters to read. Thank you for all your hard work--it showed as is much appreciated. |
| Jong_Kahn | 2021.06.16 - 01:27AM | 22: Risks | Signed |
| Well...the only way I could get past both Hermione's and Eileen's UTTER stupidity in the way they handled their 'plan' was to tell myself "this is the set-up the writer established in order for Severus to get involved." But seriously, you have deliberately diminished both these women' intelligence with this plotting (yours, I mean, as well as theirs). Where is the sensible Hermione who once upon a time would NEVER have let this happen if she could have helped it? I have to say I'm rather disappointed with you here. No "10" this chapter, like all the previous ones I reviewed got. |
| Jong_Kahn | 2021.06.15 - 11:51PM | 20: Another Beginning | Signed |
| "Lucan"? "Alasdair"? Really? I guess I'm especially surprised since "Lucan" is not so different from "Lucius"--and after all the problems he's created for them! Plus you don't give them any rhyme or reason for having chosen those names. Hermione and Severus just picked them out from a baby name book? How--unwizard-like!
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| Jong_Kahn | 2021.06.15 - 02:35AM | 12: The Horror Within | Signed |
| Well-written ideas about how Tom came to find the Chamber, how he at least partly charmed Eileen to do it, and filling in the back stories of both Hagrid and Moaning Myrtle. How evilly manipulative he was (as we learned when Dumbledore first talked to Tom in the orphanage) in getting Eileen to do his bidding even as she didn't want to. He had no interest in her, save as a means to find the Chamber. You even showed that, when you had him leering at her when he was calling her "Princess". Good chapter. I always like tt when fanfic writers do a good job of filling in background details. |
| Jong_Kahn | 2021.06.13 - 01:19AM | 1: Into the Pensieve | Signed |
| Dramatic beginning! Enjoyable learning your take on Eileen's and Severus' beginnings. |
| FreeRaven | 2016.08.06 - 09:08PM | 1: Into the Pensieve | Signed |
| Bravo! I'm so excited about getting into this story. You have a great canon-centric back story here that's so in character and well written. Had an awful work day and your story appeared under Randoms.. first story I click now I'm hooked... perfect! |
| SweetTale4u | 2015.10.25 - 05:26PM | 24: The Very End | Signed |
| Just once I would love if reviewers would not reveal plot twists in their reviews. |
| sailfin | 2015.02.15 - 03:22PM | 24: The Very End | Signed |
| Great story! This one was presented well, and it is always a pleasure to read a story without glaring mistakes.
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