Reviews for Second Life
| AlbusSeverusPotter | 2022.09.11 - 04:09PM | 37: Chapter Thirty-Seven | Signed |
| It’s been what, 14 years since this story was published? And at least once a year I still find myself drawn back to it. |
| Jong_Kahn | 2022.03.28 - 03:42PM | 42: Chapter Forty-Two | Signed |
| " 'Dad Vanished it,' Ginny said. 'He said it was much too dangerous to keep. He said to tell Kingsley he’ll explain later.'
'All right,' Hermione said, but a distant alarm sounded in the back of her mind."
WHAT?? Arthur, a decades-long worker in the Ministry bureaucracy fails to understand the importance of keeping the paperwork?!?! That is SO unrealistic! Even 13 years ago that resonated with me; I just didn't comment upon it then. But the same major things stick out to me as a reader, and I remember not finding it believable before. I understand this will probably turn into a plot point for you and that's why you did it. But it's still unbelievable that an adult that grown, that responsible, that experienced with how important paperwork is--especially something as official as a will--could just destroy it, without even consulting Hermione that he was thinking of doing it!
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| Jong_Kahn | 2022.03.27 - 04:46PM | 21: Chapter Twenty-One | Signed |
| P.S. to the review I just made: Spellcheck "corrected" verasuspense into two parts, with I didn't see till after I'd posted it. My apologies to verasuspense; Spellcheck is STILL trying to change your pen name into 'vera suspense'.
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| Jong_Kahn | 2022.03.27 - 04:43PM | 21: Chapter Twenty-One | Signed |
| Rereading this story, even after 13 years has me noting details I hadn't registered (at least as strongly) when I read it in 2009. I appreciate your having made MadEye a more sympathetic---and well-rounded--characher. As vera suspense noted, his two pet phrases got old and really annoying all too quickly. Plus, the fact Moody's a more ancillary character means he's a better choice for the witness to their wedding/Dumbledore's plan. No one would expect him to be someone Albus would confide in to that degree. And certainly no one would expect him to actually be in on Snape's true side. Well thought-out plot, dear author, and well-written! |
| Jong_Kahn | 2022.03.27 - 03:36PM | 17: Chapter Seventeen | Signed |
| It's been 13 years since I read this story the first time. Grissomesque's review right before mine (4 years ago!) was right, quoting your last paragraph with MadEye Moody as masterful. You were reminding us as well as Hermione, that he was the only witness left of her marriage to Snape, and Dumbledore's plan. So glad he was there to give her the assurance she had done exactly what she was supposed to in that hour.
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| startbynature | 2021.04.13 - 05:37AM | 48: Chapter Forty-Eight | Signed |
| Beautiful plot driven drama.
Both characters v much in character at all times. I remembered certain scenes from this when I read it in 2008- snape coming to the tent, snape saving the trio at Malfoy manor, that after spending three weeks hunting down these scenes I have found the story again. Saved forever now. Fast becoming my head canon. |
| sandpiper | 2021.02.28 - 04:23PM | 2: Chapter Two | Signed |
| It is very well written and it looks so far like a quite original turn of the idea, even if the idea itself isn't, but still I don't quite understand all the reasoning. They don't need to be married for Hermione to be a liaison between Snape and the Order, on the contrary, it has to be well hidden, so they marry only on the off-chance that he survives, but then why Hermione being his wife would be any more convincing for the court? She could have been duped into marring him. And why not a muggle marriage that would not be for life, hell, why not one of the older witches like Minerva? I mean is it just to move the plot along, or is there something behind those omissions, etc.? |
| peanut997 | 2021.01.16 - 06:52AM | 48: Chapter Forty-Eight | Signed |
| I cannot tell you how much I enjoyed this story. The way it weaved in with the actual story made it seem so real. And I love how you didn’t end it with the final battle - I’ve never read anything before that went through the trial and aftermath and how hard that must all have been on them. Beautiful story, thank you so much for sharing it |
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