Reviews for A Choice of Roads
Jong_Kahn | 2021.10.16 - 12:38AM | 2: Fools for Love | Signed |
Another well-characterized chapter! One minor quibble, which is down on line 23 (beginning "Hermione was furious."), the third sentence in, the second phrase. Instead of " – he had stammered his apology to her in such a heartfelt way it was impossible not to be angry with him", I think you meant "..it was impossible TO be angry with him." Otherwise that sentence is saying she HAD to be angry with him, since it was impossible NOT to be angry. But another "10" for your otherwise perfect writing...! |
ceecee9898 | 2010.11.15 - 10:44AM | 2: Fools for Love | Signed |
great story
Author's Response: Thank you. :) |
ceecee9898 | 2010.11.15 - 01:53AM | 2: Fools for Love | Signed |
Favorited! they are all so in character. snape is a hottie.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. ^_^ |
ElectricBloo | 2008.03.26 - 04:57PM | 2: Fools for Love | Signed |
Cheers for posting. |
Nadrek | 2008.03.26 - 02:06AM | 2: Fools for Love | Signed |
Surely Hermione is bright enough (at least once prompted) to not associate proximity with cause - particularly given she apparently had an extended stay in the infirmary? |
midwife_witch | 2006.07.31 - 12:43AM | 2: Fools for Love | Signed |
This is good so far, but can we please just agree to a ban on Dumbledore twinkling? Honestly, the man twinkles more here on Ashwinder than the Christmas tree lights do every winter at Rockefeller Center (Sorry to rant - it's a pet peeve of mine.).
Author's Response: Thanks for that! Sorry, I was unable to resist the Dumbledore-twinkling (wasn't strong enough ;-) ). |
sully2 | 2006.07.28 - 01:26PM | 2: Fools for Love | Signed |
I like that she found out that Snape helped in her recovery, and Dumbledore's meddling twinkle. ~closetravenclaw |
MollysSister | 2005.11.18 - 10:39PM | 2: Fools for Love | Signed |
Who knew Lavender would point out the obvious behavior? I am glad that Hermoine now has a clue about who cooked up her medicine. Being appreciated is a good feeling. Can Servus feel appreciated? |
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