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Reviews for Dark Desecration

Aturia2005.11.24 - 01:03AM2: TrespassingSigned
Dark, dark, evil Snape...but a great, yet accurate rendition of his character if the other side was winning the war...an interesting "what if" look at the malevolent side of Snape...could he really be that way?... after all JKR did say he was "a deeply, horrible person"...so I think there is always that possibility for Snape's evil side to emerge.

Author's Response: Yep, this goes along the lines of deeply horrible, doesn't it? With the way he's always so nasty in canon, I do think he likes having authority and power over someone, so throw in a bit of "need," and he might truly take advantage of things. Thank you.

GinnyW2005.11.24 - 12:42AM2: TrespassingSigned
This was easier to read... not because his behaviour is any less despicable, but because it's not going through her emotions. I feel horribly sorry for Hermione and her situation.

Despite everything, this is very well written, Sun. Both pieces.

Author's Response: Thanks, doll. I appreciate you reading over it even though the premise is less than favorable.

kabochon2005.11.24 - 12:16AM2: TrespassingSigned
Man, oh man, oh man....no freaking wonder! I think the lines that struck me the most was him saying that he kept her in a cloudy, submissive state so that she wouldn't fight him...bastard. Then, when he's finished, he wants her to acknowledge what he has done...asshole! And then when he says "You could console yourself better than I"...motherfucker!

This is beautifully written. Very, very keen use of words on each's behalf, but Snape's POV is just freaking devastating. And you're right, he could totally get off on abuse of power. I'm glad that Hermione wasn't a virgin. That would have just made what happens so much worse. She needs to pull a Farrah Fawcett. Excellent piece!

Author's Response: I'm with you! I read this over after I posted it, and it felt like I was reading someone else's story. I hated what I saw him doing and hated his thoughts. I thought about making Hermione a virgin, but I couldn't go through with it. So luckily, Ron or someone was there first. :)

justme2005.11.23 - 01:48PM1: Unwanted VisitorSigned
at first I thought her dad was molesting her........only to learn that its our beloved potions master. What the hell IS wrong with him>? I for one am waiting with baited breath for his reasoning, please continue southern!

Author's Response: I thought some people might wonder who it was when reading--until we get to the part where she says it's him. I wanted to keep out as much other plot as I could to concentrate on her thoughts. Snape's chapter, though, has all the answers. Thanks.

willowywitch2005.11.23 - 02:08AM1: Unwanted VisitorSigned
wow that was pretty powerful. i don't think i've read a fic like this before, sure i've read the non-concentual type before, but this one is deep. it gave me shivers. wow. i definately want to hear the rest of this.

Author's Response: Thanks. I was trying to keep as much extra plot out of it as I could that way I could concentrate only on her feelings. I'll have the next POV in a few minutes.

notsosaintly2005.11.22 - 11:24PM1: Unwanted VisitorSigned
I am breaking my silence for you, dear. I have to say a few things about this story.

I was most happy to beta this for you. This subject matter is very sensitive. I know you did not write this story for the readers' enjoyment. You wrote it to tell a story, to show how a victim of sexual abuse feels. The first person POV showed perfectly the conflicting emotions of the victim: the shame over being touched, the shame over the body's betrayal. I know that anyone who has experienced something similar has probably felt the same way, though many are probably in denial. IN NO WAY did you turn this into something that was glorified; IN NO WAY did you turn sexual abuse into a form of entertainment; IN NO WAY was this made "beautiful" NOR could it be considered a PWP.

I think sometimes we want so badly to tell a story that we take two characters we all know and love and write the story for them. I suppose this does not go over very well with those who wish Snape was the misunderstood romantic. However, the bottom line is that CanonSnape is not a nice Snape. JKR has said that herself. He is not romantic or ooey-gooey-lovey-dovey. He is a Death Eater, a spy, and a Slytherin: all things that JKR has publicly expressed dismay over people "falling in love" with. I will be interested in reading Snape's point of view, when you have finished.

As for Hermione... victims of sexual abuse/molestation feel ashamed. How one would react in this situation is individual and oftentimes goes against how others expect that person to behave. And, I would have to say that here you picked the right pairing of characters. Hermione would feel as though she had a lot to lose by telling her "secret" BECAUSE people would think she would be too smart to let this happen to her; therefore, in my most humble opinion, she would mostly likely keep silent.

You did a wonderful job writing this story. You made this situation "real" for many people. It probably made a number of people uncomfortable and unsure of what to say. Unfortunately, those who have never experienced a situation like this seem to be the ones who have suddenly become "experts" on how one would/would not behave and/or think in a situation like this. You have done the subject justice for those who actually HAVE experienced something similar. Kudos.

Author's Response: Thanks for all of your support, my dear. You've just worded exactly how I feel. Thanks for beta reading chapter two. I'm gonna post that in a few minutes.

sully22005.11.22 - 08:45PM1: Unwanted VisitorSigned
I am not sure what to say (for once). Although the subject matter was dark, I was not as freaked about it as some--until I started reading all the posts--now I am just dwelling on the darkness. Very well written, and you have captured the 'numbness.' I think it will be interesting to read Snape's POV.

Author's Response: I'll have his pov up in a few minutes. Some people will be affected more than others. I think it takes another person's take on it sometimes to make you think on it differently. LOL..

demonicpixy2005.11.22 - 05:55AM1: Unwanted VisitorSigned
Very well written. Tough subject to write but you did a good job.

Author's Response: Thank you. I'll have Snape's POV up shortly.

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