Hermione's mother's letter--For shame!
It's hardly fair for a parent to treat a child like that who's experiencing a time of transition.
I myself near graduation from college, and if my mother sent me a form letter like that, I'd never forgive her!
I hope Mrs. Granger gets her comeuppance--And *soon*!
I will start by saying that your writing style is solid and well done however I personaly didn't like the story the sex was to brutal in the begining and frankly its very unlikley that she would find any satisfaction after that. The whole story just seemed unlikely.